Saturday, October 27, 2012

That scene from my book


The knife broke free from his hand; my attackers’ eyes widened as large as saucers and he took a step back. I brandished the oddly twisted blade and threaten him.
“Now leave before I cut you.”
     Oddly the man smiled at hearing that. His arm lashed out. I cringed and raised the knife to block the blow. The hand struck and molded around the knife. The cold steel edge sliced through skin and sinew, blood gushed down and dripped onto the ground.
     I met his eyes, they shone. He threw himself back with a smile on his face. He grips his hands together tightly in front of him. His hands snapped out leaving a trail of crimson between them. It hangs there slowly undulating. I find myself transfixed as it slowly rotates into a thin sheet. The blood seemed to flow within itself. I saw him then. Everything that made this man was displayed for all to see. Anger. Lust. Hate. These I saw first but I grew to know him I saw that they were laced with underlying emotions. Fear, need, and loneliness had burnt themselves into every part of this man. My study was interrupted by a form taking place in front of everything else. A feral dog began running towards me in the blood. Its dark red nose broke the surface causing it to ripple. I had never been this terrified before in my life. I completely froze as the animal bore down on me. Its full weight struck me and knocked me to the ground. Its great jaws, still dripping with the blood it came from opened wide preparing to snap on the soft flesh of my throat. I only felt the lightest pressure of teeth and smelled the scent of dog and blood before it was lifted off of me.
     A blur shot over me and into the beast. I raised myself to my elbows only to see a tall two legged bird crushing the head of the dog. Its skull was cracked and its jaws were broken off to the side yet it still struggled beneath the powerful legs. I looked up to the man; he writhed on the ground, sharp cries slipping through his mouth.
     He froze and so did the dog. Then the man got up onto all fours and the dog went limp. He ran out of the alley on hands and feet barking as he left.  
     “I wondered whether he was going to die or break first. It’s a tragedy but that’s the only way you can deal with thugs like that.”
     I whirled around. A woman stood several paces behind me. She was pretty, with a soft heart shaped face, delicate pink lips, and shining blue eyes. She wore trousers and a long sleeved shirt; they were dark and well fitting. A hood covered her hair but two golden locks escaped and curled down the side of her face.
     “Who are…?” I began.
     “I was going to compliment you for taking his knife. But, then you managed to cut him with it. Are you stupid?”
     “Why would I…?”
     “I can’t believe I wasted my time saving you. It would have been a mercy to let you die instead of making you live with your own idiocy.
     “That’s…”
     “Whatever, come with me.” And with that she sprinted out of the alley alongside the large bird.
     I stood there dazed for a minute. Questions blazed through my skull. What just happened? How did that dog come out of a puddle of blood? Can I trust that woman? Who was she? Then another question moved to the front of my mind. Who am I?

Update and new writing post

  So got a comment asking me why I hadn't posted in a while (sister) the reason is that I forgot about it. Plus I have had very little time. See, I just finished the ACT, a fun little test where they determine how well you do in subjects like math, English, science and reading, then they send that information off to colleges so that they can know if they want you in their school.

  Well I feel like did fairly well, I spent some time studying during the past month, not nearly as much as I should have but i think I did better than the first time, on which I scored a 27, this time I've had the advantage of not being sick but also the distinct disadvantage of not having taken any math or science classes this year. English and reading are a piece of cake because well. I enjoy both of those plus having to copy-edit people's newspaper articles before they get published makes correcting things really quick and easy.

 That's pretty much it for now, um I've decided that I am going to post a scene from the book I'm working on, please remember it is a very rough draft but any helpful criticism would definitely be appreciated.